即兴创作原创英文My Girl （附创作过程）

henryjackson

词:henryjackson(chaoyoyo)
曲:henryjackson(chaoyoyo)
用一个陌生的伴奏即兴创作出来的，花了1天写词，一天录。我把第一个是我最后确定下来的小样，第二个是当时第一次即兴乱哼的（鸟语），希望大家点评，毕竟是我第一次写作，请多多指教：
(版權所有，剽竊有罪)
Can't you run? everybody wants your tongue but
I'm crazy about your soul Hey my girl
Don't you know? Noisy parties don't worth a toast come on
Get on my car let's go
I won't be driving a long and stop for smoking alone
The wind is blowing me so cold
I won't be looking around and keeping searching to find a girl like you
and I'm writing a song and I'm begging to sun
to sing and shining from our above
The angle is flying around the arrow is shooting me down on the ground

Rap:
Your life is gotta be a little lovely change
I will build a kindom and you gonna be the queen
Honey can you feel it
Heart's beating the rap  It's crazy
nobody gonna change it you will be my sexy lady

Can't you run? everybody wants your tongue but
I'm crazy about your soul Hey my girl
Don't you know? Noisy parties don't worth a toast come on
Get on my car let's go

远瞻影音

很好哟，我喜欢清晰版的哈

canuud

调调儿很好听 英文也蛮标准的   但是rap的每句末尾的加重太大了 = =  突然来一个这么大的声音  吓死我了

不过  还是很不错的  支持一个！

伊乐天

楼主是天才,听起来很有感觉
虽然我不懂英文

yyrock_0417

还是蛮有问道的，支持原创！

henryjackson

还是蛮有问道的，支持原创！
yyrock_0417 发表于 2009-5-17 22:04

是味道还是问题？

shermini

感觉还是不错的，我喜欢韩式的

小阿凯

天啊
太好听的歌了
打榜打榜
OH YEAH

ADIN

很不错呢，很洋气的感觉。。。。。。。。。

henryjackson

嘿嘿，准备再写一首韩式风格的